50 WORD STORY
BOMB
“Get On!!” Reiko shouts to Adam who was staggering to get on. She turned on the radar and immediately the helicopter takes off. Adam’s screams falter as the blast from the bomb chases them. A blinding orange light fills the sky and behind them, remnants of a blasted city remained.
HIM & HER
Tries not to smile too widely; failed. The silence was tangible and once again, you smiled. She had her hands near yours. You contemplate. Handphone beeps. It’s Jen. A silent hiss. Your exasperation at being perturbed was clear. You slowly turned and faked a smile, “Excuse me,It’s my grandma.”
CTU
“Alright! Prepare to move in! On my count. ONE.TWO.THREE” Moments later, there was a blast. Then gunshots and curses flew across the room. Mario staggers towards the window with a black bag tightly clenched in his hands. “Papa Alpha! He’s jumping out of the window! Zack, MOVE IN!”
UNCERTAINED
Lana stood outside the room; fearful of what’s ahead. Death seems to be looming inside. “Ms Lang, to the corner please” Doctor Dencal motions her inside. She braves herself, walks to the corner and gently moves the white piece of cloth off the body. “Oh my god. It’s not him”
THEM
The door was slightly ajar, Jessica moves closer and presses her head in between the empty space of the door and the wall. She could see her father; doe-eyed, holding a fairly fragmented photo. Of herself. Of him. Of the most beautiful lady in the world. Mother.Wife. Of them.
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I like your writing style but in Number 4 and 5, it seems like the start of a story rather than a full story. In an assignment like this, story economy is key and you need more practice in that area – telling more by writing less.